[OWASP-GUIDE] Re: [OWASP-LEADERS] Black Hat Presentation draft - please review and comment

[Rogan Dawes]

Andrew van der Stock wrote:
> Hi folks,
> 
> I need feedback on this by no later than June 13 as that's the submission
> date.
> 
> http://www.greebo.net/owasp/private/vanderStockOWASPGuide2.0ppt.zip
> 
> Notes:
> 
> On the Mac (which is the platform I will be using), there are
> semi-translucent shadows on the text which make it readable. I am not sure
> if PC people get to see the shadows. I'm going to lighten the background
> image up considerably to avoid this issue altogether.
> 
> What it looks like on my Mac:
> 
> (364 kb)
> http://www.greebo.net/owasp/private/pic2.png
> 
> I will be introducing only a few more slides (ie one per chapter).
> 
> I will be _reducing_ the content in each slide, by either making a new slide
> from one over-full slide, or simply making the slide more "bullet pointy".
> 
> (My presentation style is not to read the Powerpoint, but to elucidate for
> at least a few minutes on each, touching on each of the topics.)
> 
> Thoughts gratefully welcomed
> Andrew 
> 

Spelling mistakes:

You use the word "canocalization" on one of your slides. I think you are 
looking for "canonicalization", derived from "canonical" as in 
"authoritative"?

"Use compiler features, correct THEM fast" ?

you may want to change the download URL to 
"documentation/guide/downloads.html" to fit it onto one line

"If I don't get AN answer for you"

I'm also not sure what you are aiming for under the "Threat Risk Model" 
slide. There are a lot more assets than reputation and user posts and 
attachments in general. On this slide, you don't seem to be talking 
about a specific BBS product, so you may want to be more general?

Hope this helped.

Rogan